An Amazing Movie Script
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There is a scene in which Robert will refocus his emotional state while with his parents and siblings as this plays on the family radio.
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Looks awesome! Yeah, I'd really like to hear the whole story. Though, it looks like you're writing as a story, and not as a screenplay.
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Originally Posted by Cody>
Though, it looks like you're writing as a story, and not as a screenplay.Yes. Writing as a story is something I'm fairly decent at. Writing screenplays not so much, which is why I'm dragging Richard into this! LOL.
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Originally Posted by Richard >
Do you have it mapped out in terms of scenes and structure? What's your pitch? It would be good if you could summarise it in one or two sentences, give us a feel of the whole thing.Oh man, I don't even know where to start! The true story as it actually happened is so chock full of drama, emotion and human triumph as is, it's difficult to summarize in just a few sentences but here goes...
How a world war brought two human beings, from opposite sides of that war, together who didn't know how much they needed each other. It's a story of two people overcoming pain, personal loss and hopelessness amid cultural, political, linguistical and familial pressures.
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Originally Posted by Richard >
Do you have it mapped out in terms of scenes and structure? What's your pitch?Not yet. That's where you come in. I could probably lay out the whole story using index cards on the floor or pin them on a cork wall. But it might be good to collaborate with you on how best to structure them within the 4 acts.
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Have you ever looked into this, Richard?
https://www.scriptrevolution.com/guide/turn-and-burn -
Well, I've written 7 pages of JUST the outline. I'll be talking to the niece of the protagonist this Thursday to iron out some details and put as much as possible onto a timeline. But for now, I have my opening scene and a theme for the main character...
Based on a True Story
_Opening Scene:
_1952
_North Carolina
_(Credits start)A panoramic shot of a rural North Carolina road from above as a dark green, somewhat weather-worn 1939 Plymouth model pickup truck slowly drives into focus, its bed full of home belongings such as tables, chairs, an ironing board, wood boxes and the like, tightly held in place by a crisscrossed rope. The truck is heading west, at a steady speed, maybe 45 mph or so. Another camera angle shows the truck a little closer and centered but not close enough to see the faces of the driver and passenger clearly.
As varying camera angles follow the traveling truck, a Japanese woman’s somber, resigned voice is heard as if speaking to herself. “この世界に…私の居場所はない.” [translation: “This world…has no place for me.”] (credits end).
The truck crosses the state line into Tennessee and fades into the distance.
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I've been AWOL from all the threads, but cheers for the Turn and Burn link. Working through it, looks good.
Btw, I don't have a lot of experience so can't give any hard and fast advice. Read some stuff about method, but can't remember it all lol. But I will help in any way I can, and I love hearing ideas and playing with them. Bring it on
One thing I thought, which is also good practice; try rewriting that opening scene in as few words as possible while still retaining everything you want it to illustrate/describe. And then try doing the same thing with the outline. Maybe seven pages is a bit long for an outline.
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